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 Since there is no other role within the bigger story, the construction of this chapter is pretty free of constraints. The Big Inciting Incident should come at the beginning of the next chapter.
+## Further Work - Questions
+- Is the dramatic structure implemented properly?
+    - Shouldn't both of the meeting with the professor happen before the climax?
+ - What does someone who doesn't know hackerspaces learn about the Space?
+ - Isn't Suzanne too shallow?
+    - She is defined pretty much by the dedication to her project and her determination.
+    - She made a brave decision only thanks to the supportive community she imagined herself in.
+ - Doesn't Suzanne lack a feel of "agency"? Is she presented as a _character_, or just someone things happen to?
+## Loose ideas
+ - Showing Suz in her room, with an anatomical [poster](https://s-media-cache-ak0.pinimg.com/originals/d1/d2/1e/d1d21e74605b7e0a2e2c9e26e0cce941.jpg) and some homages to other comics / movies. She's a live person and likes pop culture as well. Does she admire Tony Stark's resourcefulness (like Nawres)? Does she read [Dresden Codak](http://dresdencodak.com/)? What does she think about it? She definietely likes [EEVBlog](https://www.eevblog.com/).
+ - Put Samer from Palestine and Nawres from Iraq somewhere in there, as a bridge to the real world. They both work on similar projects in their respective hackerspaces.
+ - Clash with [Cynic](characters:main:c_n1c)'s sexism in the first scenes, only to be heartened by his admiration for the work and technical excellency of her solutions. Make it so that doesn't look patronizing / doesn't make her lack a sense of agency.
+ - Don't make the professor look like an arch-nemesis. He's just a guy with mindset narrowed by years in the academic structure and is pretty honest. Can we actually show the problem with Suz's project as a _systemic_ problem instead of just lack of good will of anyone? Maybe he actually _wants to help_, but his hands are tied?
+   - _"Miss Suzanne, while I really see that you are passionate about your project, it doesn't qualify as a thesis. You have already passed last deadline and the only thing I can offer is joining a research team. Without that, you will have to wait with your thesis until next year. There is simply no other option."_
+## Drafts
+ - [Draft 1](stories:chapter1:draft1)

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